a start to my personal essay for SVA and CCA.
Almost exactly two years ago, my mom went missing. She accidentally stopped taking her antidepressants after a pharmacy mix up, which messed with her brain chemistry so much that she just left the house one day. It was raining, and she didn't even have any shoes on. I was the last to see her. Not only did I not know something was wrong right then, I hadn't known anything was wrong before that. I had no idea she was depressed until my dad was explaining it to the police officer at our house a few hours later. The support we received from the community was amazing. Not only friends were offering their help, but people we barely even knew. Kids at my school hung up fliers all over the bay, members of our synagogue helped us phone all the hospitals, and our friends made sure we ate, slept, and just were able to keep functioning. My teachers even let me take all my finals late since this was all happening the last week of the semester. My mom came back. She was cold, dirty, and crying. All I could think about lying on the bed with her waiting for the ambulance was the time she fainted in the shower when I was very young. Except this time, she wasn't the one saying everything was going to be ok, I was. I can't describe what happened to me after that. It's not something I can put in words, because I don't even know what it is. All I know is ever since then, I've focused so much more on living my life, and less on just getting through it. My grades dropped, yet it seemed like I cared more about what I was learning. I took up photography soon after that, and haven't put my camera down since. I feel this need to document every moment and every feeling, because who knows if something is going to change it forever tomorrow. Maybe that change will be for the good, but I still want to remember how I got there.
some questions I would have are:
any grammar issues?
what should I expand on or add?
is it cohesive, linear, and generally understandable?
is this a good topic, or should I wright about something else?
California, here I come. right back where I started from.